Operation Z.E.R.O.-T.W.O.

[Numbuh 412]

Kids Next Door
Operation: Z.E.R.O.-T.W.O.

Zero
Ecxact
Reports
Of
-
Two
Withstanding
Ordeal


After all that happened to the Kids Next Door after the fight with Grandfather and Numbuh Zero. Evil adults were still going full force against the Knd. After the moonbase was rebuilt all of Knd was to have a mandatory two day rest ordered by Numbuh 362 herself. After that period the decommissioning crew was busy electing a new head of decommissioning because Numbuh 86 went to a newer and better position in the Knd.
It is 2:00 in the morning when BEEP BEEP BEEP. The treehouse security alarm goes nuts. “Battlestations Team “ Numbuh 1 yelled. “Oh, I can’t believe this. It better be good,” Numbuh 5 said to the others while running down the hall. Once they got to where Numbuh 1 was he started to brief them about the situation. “There are about forty Teen Ninjas heading our way. They will be here in twenty minutes.” “What are we going to do,” cries Numbuh 3.“I say we beat the crud outta them,” Numbuh 4 said with his strong Australian accent. “You must be crazy Numbuh 4. There are tons of Ninjas out there including my sister Cree,” Abby said in disbelief. Nigel yelled to all of the others “We must come up with a plan or we’re gonna get our behinds kicked.”
“We must get to the weapons depot on level 7, or we will never survive,” Numbuh 1 said franticly. “Numbuh 3 and Numbuh 4, you two stay behind just in case we don’t make it back in time,” Ordered Numbuh 1. Wally talked to Kuki while the others got weapons “So Kuki, uh do you uh are you going anywhere Saturday night?” “Oh Wally are you asking me out?” Numbuh 3 asked. “Uh yeah I guess so.” Numbuh 3 replied “I loved to go out with you Wally.” Right after that Numbuh 1,2,and 5 got back with a S.P.L.A.K.E.R. (Solid Pine Loaded Artillery Nicely Kicks Enemy Rear), a G.U.M.Z.O.O.K.A. (Gumball Utilizing Mechanism Zings Overabundance Of Kandy Around), and a S.L.U.G.G.U.H. (Spring Loaded Uppercutting Glove Gives Unbelievable Headache).
BEEP BEEP BEEP. “The teenagers are here, Battlestations,” Numbuh 1 yelled. Right after they all got situated BOOM. “ Fire at will,” ordered Numbuh 1. It was a fight like you have never seen before. They were holding them back until Cree Lincoln threw a M.A.R.B.L.E. (Mustardy Armament Releases Big Loud Explosion) which hit Numbuh 2 in the arm. All of the teenagers just stopped firing and looked at Numbuh 2. Then all of the Teen Ninjas franticly flew towards Numbuh 2. “Uh guys a LITTLE HEEEEEELP,” Numbuh 2 said. Abby tried to make it there but it was to late. Cree just pick him up and flew away with all of the other Teen Ninjas. “ NUMBUH 2, its all my fault, I couldn’t get there in time to save him,” Numbuh 5 cried. Numbuh 1 came over to comfort her “It’s not your fault. We didn’t even know they were after them.” Numbuh 5 said to Nigel “But now I won’t be able to tell Hoagie that I TRANSMISSION INTERUPTED

Hope you like it. Tell me if what you think of it and if you want me to write a sequel.

[Alexis]

Omg, this is pure genius! You should get a career as a scriptwriter or something! Keep up the good work!

[KndloverRoz]

that is well good, my advice is try to keep within there personalitys, eg, numbuh 5 speaks in 3rd person, and the first line we see that you haven't used this is here:
“Oh, I can’t believe this. It better be good,” Numbuh 5 said to the others while running down the hall.

the "I" should be "numbuh 5".

also, i noticed, numbuh 1 saying things like
" We must get to the weapons depot on level 7, or we will never survive,”
they don't normally say must, more have to, and you used it twice in 2 quotes.
sorry about the criticism, just a few pointers, but i like the whole plot and all!

[Numbuh 412]

Hey I don't mind the criticism. It just makes you become a better writer.

[KndloverRoz]

phew! i'm just glad i didn't offend you! coz often when reading thru otehr peoples fan-fic reviews, or fan-fic rules, they often say try to keep within their personality as much as you can. lol
i'm thinking of writing a book. not really on knd ( well, it might be! ) just a book, i dunno what on yet tho, so it might end up being a soopuh doopuh knd book!

[Numbuh 412]

Here is the continued version

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Kids next door mission
Operation Z.E.R.O.-T.W.O.

Zero
Exact
Reports
Of
-
Two
Withstanding
Ordeal

“That I,” Numbuh 5 stuttered. “Incoming transmission from the Moonbase,” said Numbuh 4. Numbuh 1 replied, “What is it Numbuh 4?” “Well it is kinda hard to make out. Numbuh 65.3 must have been in a hurry. I can’t make out his writing,” Numbuh 4 said. “I can make it out. It says that they tracked a ship leaving our tree house and going to the Arctic base,” Numbuh 5 replied. “Then lets get down there as fast as possible,” Numbuh 1 ordered. “But Numbuh 2 is our only pilot. How are we going to get down there?” Numbuh 5 replied to Nigel.
WHOOOSH. The C.O.O.L.-B.U.S (Carries Operatives Overhead Luxuriously- Boasts Unbeatable Speed) does a loop-de-loop while going like eleventy bahmillion miles an hour. Luckily Numbuh 4 missed that old lady crossing the street on the way over. Numbuh 5 races out of the bus after Numbuh 4 lands and says, “LAND, LAND. Oh how I missed you. Thought Numbuh 5 would never see you again with the way Numbuh 4 drives.” Numbuh 1 gets out after Abby and looks around, “Well I don’t see anything that looks like the Teen Ninjas took over.”
BOOM. Right then a mega explosion exploded, and sent a crack in the ice for miles. And out of that crack came every supervillian that Sector V ever captured. “BATTLESTATIONS,” cried Numbuh 1. Unfortunately the villains had found the weapons vault. The toiletater found a G.U.M.Z.O.O.K.A. But he accidentally shot Mr. Boss in the head. Right about when the Crazy Old Cat Lady was about to pounce on Numbuh 3, a ship took off into the direction of the Moonbase. Numbuh 5 saw Hoagie in that ship with Cree, “Numbuh 1, Numbuh 2 is in that ship with Cree. We have to go after them,” Numbuh 5 told Nigel. “But what about all of the villains?” replied Nigel. Now Numbuh 5 was getting really mad, “I don’t care about no stupid villains when one of our teammates is in danger. Numbuh 5 won’t let that happen again.” “I understand. Team, let’s go to the Moonbase,” Nigel said.
“Hey Cree,” Numbuh 2 said romantically. “I thought I told you that I don’t like you kiddies anymore,” Cree said furiously. “I know,” Numbuh 2 replied, “But you liked me at one time.” “Stupid brats don’t know when to quit,” Cree mumbled to herself. “Where are you taking me?” Hoagie asked Cree. “To the decommissioning chamber,” the evil Teen Ninja replied. “Why would you take me there?” asked Numbuh 2. “To decommission you DUH. Man and you’re the smart kid,” Cree said as they were taking an elevator to the top floor. “You are the only one who knows about IT,” Cree said.
BOARDING MOONBASE CENTRAL a computer voice told them. The team got off of the C.O.O.L.-B.U.S. and tried to get their bearings. “OK, we now know that Cree has taken Numbuh 2 to the decommissioning chamber on the top floor. It is important we get up there before anything unspeakable happens,” Nigel ordered. “ Here we go, according to my map there is an elevator ahead of us,” Abby told the team. “Numbuh 4 push the button,” Numbuh 1 told Wallaby. “Why does it take so long for cruddy elevators to work right?” Numbuh 4 said impatiently.
DING “Take a good look, because this is the last thing you will ever see. Right after you are decommissioned, I am going to blast you into the sun, ” Cree told Hoagie. DECOMMISSIONING PROCESS BEGINGING a computer voice told Cree. DING “BATTLESTATIONS TEAM,” Numbuh 1 ordered. Numbuh 5 took a daring move and charged at Cree just to be shot down. Right then the plunger was starting to close in on Numbuh 2. But Abby charged at Cree and caught her off guard. She took Cree out with one blow and destroyed the decommissioning machine and saved Hoagie. Then Numbuh 5 took Cree and decommissioned her once and for all.
“Hey Hoagie,” Numbuh 5 said to Numbuh 2. “Oh hey Abby,” Numbuh 2 replied. “Hey, why did she want to decommission you?” Numbuh 5 asked. “Oh that, uh I have a uh secret crush on her,” Numbuh 2 said while blushing. “OKAY. Anyone for ice cream back at the treehouse,” Numbuh 5 asked the team. “Yeah” “You bet” “Let’s go” “I call Rocky Road,” the team replied.

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Tell me what you think of it and fill free to criticize

[KndloverRoz]

thats really, really good! the only thing i havr to criticise is that sometimes it's hard to firgure out whos speaking, otherwise, fine!

[kukinwally4eva]

i love the 2/5ness so cute and of course the 3/4ness ;D